Fluffy cloud, relax the sky.
You deepen its pure blue,
But I’m not looking high somewhere.
My mind runs cloudy, too.
My mind desires a faster way
To calm its anxious fight:
“Relax. Sit tall. Observe it all.”
But I am teased by light.
Written for dVerse Quadrille #18 posted by Kim with the challenge word being “cloud”.
a very clever use of cloud’s different meaning. Great!
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Thank you, Rose!
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you’re welcome, Frank!
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I like the way your quadrille starts with being teased by a cloudy mind and ends with being teased by light. The word teased strengthens the impression of anxiety and insecurity, with the light a possible solution, but it could also make things worse. A sensitive exploration of a cloudy mind.
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Thanks, Kim. The word teased was supposed to suggest anxiety or tension as you mentioned even with the light.
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Love this take on the prompt, Frank 🙂 Kudos
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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I specially like: My mind runs cloudy, too. A creative approach Frank !!
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Thanks, Grace!
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I like the appreciation of cloud but preference for light.
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Thanks, Brian! The cloud and the light of the sky both go together as I think about it more.
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Rolls of the tongue from cloudy to light.
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Thank you, Paul! I was hoping the meter would roll off the tongue easily.
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I love your take on the prompt and especially ‘Fluffy cloud, relax the sky. You deepen its pure blue’
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Thanks, Xenia!
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You are very welcome :o)
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I’m teased by light too.. love that conclusion.
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Thanks, Björn! I like being teased by the light as well.
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We do want that faster way to ease our anxieties. Nice rhyme and flow to this, Frank.
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Thanks, Victoria! I’m glad the words flowed well.
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Oh, Frank. I absolutely love this. The rhythm, the rhyme, the message – and that pull of light. YES.
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Thanks, de! I’m glad you liked both the sound and the sense of the poem.
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“teased by light, too”….. makes me think of the way light dabbles through trees making wonderful shadows on the ground. “Observe it all” is hard work but rewarding
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Thanks, George! It is hard to relax, sit tall and observe if one is anxious and not relaxed. I wasn’t relaxed when I wrote the poem and I tried to describe what that felt like.
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love the idea of being ‘teased by the light.’
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Thank you, Stacy! I liked the idea as well.
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I really like this and your take on the prompt. 🙂
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Thank you, Arcadia!
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I sometimes have a cloudy mind and my visions become a bit cloudy as well. An original take on clouds..
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Thanks, Truedessa! Sometimes the clouds leave my mind and sometimes I just have to enjoy them.
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