I’d rather be up here somewhere
Than in that river rushing on,
Dissolving tears without a care
And draining hope till it has gone.
With hope removed, sent off to sea,
The body stumbles far behind,
Soon mindless without misery,
A plaything for some nymph to find.
Linked to dVerse Poetics hosted by Paul Dear with the theme “The River”.
Awwww. I do like the idea of a nymph discovering someone’s lost hope.
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It hopefully ends a poem about flooding on some positive note. Thank you!
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Its not nice to be caught up in so much water, I know~ Such misery hopefully the rescue comes soon ~
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Since I can’t swim, I tend to be cautious around rivers larger than those I can easily wade across and see the bottom. Thanks!
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Floods are indeed a terrible thing. We used to get a flood every three or so years when I lived in West Yorkshire but luckily we too were away from trouble up on the hill. Always difficult visiting the town afterwards and seeing the devastation though. Great tke on the prompt Frank. Thanks for joining.
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Thanks, Paul! I’ve been through a couple of floodings near where we lived at different places. One was a tiny creek that became quite wide overnight although not very deep. Our neighbors used a row boat. Luckily we could get out the front door. It was a lot of fun watching the water rise, but not so much fun for people with basements.
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No. No fun at all.
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Whereabouts in Yorkshire were you? We used to live round there…
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Hebden Bridge
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rivers can both be gentle and treacherous, and I can picture the destruction you describe with your words here. Draining hope till its all gone is very symbolic of the effect it can have physically and emotionally. Lots of strong emotions in those few lines.
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I was looking for a more positive approach to river, but this one kept coming back. Rivers and other bodies of water are beautiful but they are like a depth that I don’t want to explore. Thanks!
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living on a peninsula I am surrounded by water and the rivers here cannot contain the monsoon’s rage, the destruction you write about is very real here. so this was very appreciated.
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In your situation, I can see how real floods could be very dangerous. I was looking at this more metaphorically as situations that people find themselves flooded with despair.
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We both wrote about floods, shedding light on the dark side of rushing water; dikes & dams busting, swollen arroyos choked with flash floods spiked with lightning
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Yes, we did. I was in Colorado Springs where our daughter lives and walked on the trail at Monument Valley Park. Monument Creek goes through the park and I heard it had flash floods that took out the bridges. Seeing how deep that valley is I wondered how high the flash flood would rise. Of course that is a very mountainous area draining off rainwater rapidly. Thanks.
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This is soo touching, so poignant.. especially “Soon mindless without misery, a plaything for some nymph to find.”
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I don’t know why I added that nymph, but it allows the river to act without a care. Thank you!
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I took this as a metaphorical flood of unwanted, though I imagine the literal flood to be just as severe if not more so. I liked the rhyme and tempo of this as well.
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Yes, I was thinking of this as a metaphorical flooding with reminders of the damage a real flood could cause. I am grateful for the prompt, since this would not have come to my mind without it. I am glad you liked the rhyme and meter.
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Delightfully whimsical. Love the rhyme.
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Thank you. One of the nice things about having a fixed form and rhyme is I know when the lines and the poem are finished.
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Thought provoking!
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Thank you!
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Ah, this is an interesting perspective……one thinks of the river as beautiful, often forgetting that they can flood and bring peril………….
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sorry – the above is me, Sherry Blue Sky, forgot to fill in the info…….
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No problem. Thank you for the comment!
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Rivers, even metaphorical rivers, can be perilous. Thank you!
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The river can be treacherous- a safe distance is good
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I prefer walking along the banks of a river. Although I have canoed on them, and that gets you there faster, the trail is more peaceful for me.
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Well said!
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Thank you!
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Really nice!
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I am glad you liked it!
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Your poem’s rhythm flows like a river in spate – very powerful!
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I am glad you liked the rhythm. Rhythm does help the words flow.
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I agree. Rivers at times can be treacherous. I like how this ends with nymphs finding those that were lost though. 😁
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I like the idea of nymphs, some conscious beings, associated with waters to soothe the dangers.
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You wrote from a totally different perspective….true….loved that!
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I am glad you liked it! Thanks!
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Hey Frank. Yes, water can be treacherous. I remember setting up camp on our property in North Carolina mountains years ago, far enough from a stream, and by morning the water was 6 inches from the tent. Scary. Good poem….and it points to the possible fear of floods….we get them in South Georgia a lot and I always wonder about the domestic and wildlife. gone.
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I’ve been surprised by how high water can rise. Rivers don’t wait either. Although I avoid getting in them unless it is a tiny brook I like walking on river trails and watching from a distance. There is something soothing about a river from the safety of a trail.
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Yes, a toll path as on canals. However, the toll path by my house in NJ where I was raised was paved by the graves of the Irish workman. The Raritan Canal built in 1832, by all Irish immigrants (black slaves were thought to be too valuable to use on this canal) but the typhoid fever hit and the Irish died in the hundreds. Changed the way I felt about this toll path.
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Most of the river trails I’ve walked along are in forest preserves, but I do remember walking along an old canal with a path that I assume was used to tow the boats long ago. I didn’t know much of the history behind it. There are more ways to get washed away than by falling into a raging river. I would still walk such a trail, but my awareness would drift to the history as well as the scenery.
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As always, you say much more than is apparent on the surface. In this case the surface of that dangerous river…
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Thank you! It is not really about the surface river. People are usually able to avoid these. It is more about believing one has fallen into a metaphorical river rushing them away whether one actually has or not. If I rewrite this, I will probably put in another stanza offering a more positive resolution.
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SMIles.. raised
on River Front..
Grand Mother’s
Warning.. put a finger
in the edge of a River
Bank..
withdraw
a nub of knuckle
bone skinless
left
in
Alligator Teeth..
hmm.. i visualized
the pARt after Grand
Mother sAid.. it’LL bite
your finger off..
and oh..
Lord..
the floods..
ruined stuffed animals of Love..
And now all i remember when
i go back to that Bank is Family Love..
Better Love than Alligator River Teeth..:)
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That river’s gonna get me! Thank you for your comment. I am going to have to watch out for those alligators also. Love is better.
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Yep.. 12 footers spotted
Not too far away from
Home then..
All dry
On a
Forest Hill
Now with.. sMiLes..:)
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Rugged and dangerous, rivers are not always peaceful and I share the fear for any situation where it exists….nature has such power as you remind us to take care out there.
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I usually keep my distance as well, but I also like rivers. They drain the continent and keep the flow of life going. Thank you, Kathy!
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well, a different perspective. just read this and the other river poems, and realize we somehow associate the river with a nymph. 🙂
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The nymph is a common theme, kind of the opposite of using something like H2O to describe the river. It personifies the river which I kind of like doing even though I suspect it goes against Ruskin’s 19th century pathetic fallacy objection to anthropomorphism.
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Having had to canoe to our city home in Iowa for about a week…..and seeing other folks’ homes in our neighborhood absolutely devastated (ours just had the lower level inundated by a few inches)…I do know the “anger” of flooding waters. Yep — sure would have liked to have seen a nymph arrive those days! 🙂
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Although I normally think of nymphs as beautiful maidens bathing in a gently flowing river I wonder if the ancients thought the nymphs were also responsible for the flooding.
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I like the mood you have created by having the poem’s speaker keeping a safe distance ‘up here’ from the river dissolving tears and draining hope … it’s interesting how nature can reflect human feelings in different ways.
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I like safe distances from rivers taking the forest trail rather than a canoe. Nature does look like it can be angry or peaceful at times. Maybe in some way it is.
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Soon mindless without misery,
A plaything for some nymph to find.
When hope is lost all are affected. A lovely nymph can be seen to be groping in the dark! Great lines Frank!
Hank
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Thanks, Hank! Your comment made me think that the nymph could also feel hopeless.
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the last stanza sounds so enchanting and unique to me. how awesome it is to think that those we lost can be found by a nymph.
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Yes, that is one way to look at it. It is positive and perhaps more real than we imagine. Thank you!
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i agree. 🙂 you’re welcome!
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Would you mind taking a look at some of my stuff please? Im fairly new to it all and would really appreciate some feedback if you have a moment
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I enjoyed your blog and I’m following it. I would recommend looking at other people’s blogs. Pay attention to what widgets they add to their blogs. If you like what they did add something similar to your blog. Also, to increase visibility you could participate in writing prompts. This post was motivated by one of the dVerse Poets Pub writing prompts. I would not have written it without that prompt. There are other groups like this. What you do is write a post according to the prompt, link it in their original post and then comment on the other people that linked with yours. This gets you familiar with the people who are writing the same sort of posts that you are and get you in the habit of commenting and receiving comments. I also have a Google+, twitter and facebook page. They are mainly used to highlight other people’s work that I particularly enjoyed and help make this blog more visible. I take photos with my phone and use the ones I enjoy to brighten up the page. You can also add audio. I store my audio recordings on SoundCloud.
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Thank you so much this has been so helpful
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