Balloon says, “Stop! Don’t let me pop!
It’s wonderful today!”
I don’t know. This wind has so
Confused my once clear way.
“See those skies? Let me rise,
Vanishing toward Sun
Who’ll hold me still, do what he will
Until his will is done.
Linked to dVerse Quadrille Monday hosted by WhimsyGizmo with prompt word “balloon”.
Photo: “Sky and Birds” by the author.
“Let me rise…”
“until his will is done.”
YES. Perfection, Frank. Thank you.
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Thank you!
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Ah wonder if the balloon should trust the sun!!!
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Probably not. I wouldn’t, but it figures I’ll pop it or deflate it in some way. Thanks!
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I love the sight of a balloon set free… but I wonder if it’s the balloon who will…
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The balloon is going to eventually pop or do whatever they do up there.
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Oh Frank, I just love this. I read first, then listened, and your reading really brought out the message and skilled use of rhyme (internal and end) and meter. Made me happy.
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I am glad you liked the audio and the rhyme-meter sound! Thank you!
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Love the voice of the balloon Frank ~ I will check again later for the reading ~
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It goes against my philosophy to personify these things, but it doesn’t go against my enjoyment of the idea that a balloon might talk back to me to cheer me up. Thank you!
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Really enjoyed the read…it brings it to life ~
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Your reading of the piece enriched it immensely, as Victoria said. I got several vibes–sun & God & fate toying with your unleashed balloon.
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Thank you, Glenn! I’m glad you liked it. I was thinking of multiple interpretations of this, not all of them internally consistent, but that doesn’t matter.
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Fabulous twist on the point of view – very clever! Appreciate the allusion, as well 🙂
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Thank you! I’m glad you like it.
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The only thing better than reading this was listening to it! Joyful.
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I am glad you liked the audio!
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Yes, let me rise until His will is done. Excellent!
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Yes, there is the idea of “His will is done”. The original version had “it”, but then I changed the pronoun to “his”. I left some ambiguity by not capitalizing “his”. Thank you!
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Yes and left the door open for different beliefs. 🙂
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I loved hearing you read your poem out loud 😀 Beautifully rendered.
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I am glad you liked the audio, Sanaa!
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There’s something bittersweet about a balloon that’s been set free (or that has escaped). Maybe it’s the look on a child’s face when their balloon has escaped or it could be the movement of a free balloon when it’s picked up by a gust of wind. Very whimsical and thought-provoking Frank.
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Thank you, Kim. I don’t think I’ve ever let a balloon go. Even as a child, I remember wondering if it would land somewhere it shouldn’t, but I think the idea of a balloon rising feels very liberating and positive.
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I remember the first time my daughter let go of a balloon and the way the shock and despair turned almost to wonder before she burst into tears. I only reacted like that when a balloon burst – I still jump when that happens!
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So even the seemingly inanimate balloon goes the way of God. Awesome!
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I think everything ultimately goes the way of God in spite of occasional detours. Thank you!
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the balloon’s destiny so uncertain, blown by wind, or held by hands, then released when unwanted , such a fat to endure. the rhyme was so sweet and loved the balloon’s soft plea! Enjoyed listening to the “balloon’s” voice.
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I am glad you liked the balloon’s plea to be set free. Thank you, Gina!
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The balloon probably thinks the sun is his big yellow mommy, time to go home. That’s great, thanks Frank
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That might be. The sun looks round like a balloon. Thank you!
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So reminds me of that spunky balloon that slips from the hand of a little child.
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I can see that balloon trying to slip free. It is taking the optimistic and perhaps more realistic position while the “I” in the poem is confused and depressed by the windy day.
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The only way a balloon has any say about his fate is if he’s let go…to pop or maybe gently lose altitude until he rests wherever he ends up. You made a lot of people think about this little balloon! 🙂
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A balloon is kind of cute and I can see how one wants the best for him. The “I” in the poem is too confused to take care of the balloon so it is probably best for the balloon to venture off alone.
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Yes, this speaks of wanting to surrender to the sky, no matter the outcome.
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I agree. There is a need to surrender. The balloon is surrendering and is optimistic. The “I” is still too confused to see that as the best option.
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this is such a moving quadrille. especially the last two lines. ❤ ❤ ❤
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They are a hopeful approach to life through a joyful surrender. Thank you, Rosema!
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I agree. You’re welcome, Frank!
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Beautifully penned and inspiring. What a great way to start the day. 🙂
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Thank you, Maria! I’m glad it made a good start for your day.
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Fait accompli, just leave it to fate and the world moves round!
Hank
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Yes. Acceptance and surrender and enjoying the ride. Thanks, Hank!
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I like this– so fun and enigmatic all at once. I love the balloon’s way of talking in the first stanza …feels just like how a balloon would talk (I’ll have to come back to listen to your reading…can’t play it at this moment)
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Thank you, Janice! A little mystery with lightheartedness is all I was aiming for.
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The title had me giggling right away, Frank. I really like your light-hearted take in this. (A shame that I can’t load the audio from where I am at the moment.)
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Thanks, Colin! It is intended to be lighthearted. I’d rather have that optimistic balloon view of reality than that of the confused “I” who feels overwhelmed by the wind. April winds do seem to take one’s hope away. They also are great for flying kites and balloons.
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Odd, isn’t it we put so much personality into objects that mean a lot to us. Thought about its electricity, too.
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As a metaphor I think the personification is acceptable. The balloon is all of us countering the “I” in the poem who is confused by the wind who is also all of us as well. Thanks for the comment, Kathy!
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I really like this perspective. Delightful piece.
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Thank you! I am glad you liked it!
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Balloon Dharma. Wonderful.
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It is like a “balloon dharma”. I hadn’t thought of it like that, but it makes sense. Thanks!
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You’re welcome.
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I once had someone tell me to change a word in my poem because I used it twice but just like in your rhyme it fits. It’s all about the timing. With you being confused I’m glad your balloon knows best. Lol!
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I did use “will” a couple times. I was trying to get as many “ill” sounds as possible at the end. I’m glad my balloon knows what’s best as well. Thanks, Bekkie!
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I know why you did it, Frank. In the poem that dVerse selected to include in the analogy (of all of the poems, why that one?) I was requested to change my double wording until I explained why I did it. Luckily I wasn’t asked to change it after that because there was nothing else that fit! Lol!
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I didn’t know using a word twice was a bad thing to do. Sometimes entire lines are identical in poems and repeated multiple times.
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I like the playful tone of the first stanza and the way that, it turned into something spiritual in the next.
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I am glad you liked it. I tried to make it playful. Thank you, Imelda!
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Love that balloon’s desire for freedom. A fun piece!
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Thank you, Brian! It is meant to be fun piece.
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Next time I hold a balloon prisoner, I’ll think of it a different way. I’ll surely set it free, where it’s meant to be. Ha ha!
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If you don’t threaten to pop the balloon, like I did, it might not mind staying closer to Earth. 🙂
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Keep this going please, great job!
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Thank you, Stephan! I am glad you liked it.
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it is about looking on the bright side of things,
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Yes, it is! Thank you, Shalilah!
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