At first you sense a peaceful, cooler green
Than jealousy can fake within its eyes,
And then a calmer red with no disguise
That anger has to wear when it is seen.
When blue becomes delightful, sparkling bright,
Beyond what reason’s ramblings can achieve,
Then violet turns away from time and leaves
You knowing there’s no need to fear the night.
Linked to dVerse Poetics hosted by Michelle (Mish) with prompt: “Write a poem about something abstract using one or more senses”.
Photo: “Colorful” by the author. The photo was taken at the Chicago Botanic Garden.
Beauty tumbles down every line
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Thank you!
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You’ve written a rainbow there, Frank 🙂
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It was a rainbow. Now that you mention it, that seems to be what patience is most like. Thanks, Kim!
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I love the way you’ve used the colors here… I love how you have coupled them to emotions.
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Thanks, Björn! I was trying to let patience be all the colors but in a positive way.
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This one has a classical grace.
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Thank you, Jane! I was trying to use an iambic pentameter line which should have a classical effect.
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The word choice suits the metre too.
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…or graceful class! Whichever, it’s a beautiful take on the challenge, Frank!
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Thanks, Bev! I am glad you found it graceful.
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I love how you have shown the qualities of each colour (and chakra) here as well as the quiet rhythm of this peace :o)
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I realized I missed yellow and orange to have all seven chakras. If I revise this, I’ll include those colors. Thanks for the idea of using chakras, Xenia!
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You are very welcome Frank 😉
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I love this one, Frank. Beautifully crafted. I think if you put a comma after ‘eyes’ it might be easier to read aloud though. Also, at least the way I pronounce it, ‘violet’ seems to mess with the iambic pentameter, which is a shame because the last line is terrific.
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I respectfully disagree with both these suggestions. It works for me as is – even though (or because?) I am reading in an Australian accent!
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We must pronounce “violet” the same way. The meter works fine for me as well, however, Ronnie’s suggestion got me thinking that I should have used purple because the color is brighter (based on examples I looked up) and it might fit the idea of “patience” better. I plan to use this poem later and I will make use of these comments for potential revisions at that time. Thanks, Rosemary!
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I added the comma after “eyes”. If it helps with the reading it is worth having it there. I pronounce violet with two syllables, sort of like VIO-let, but I can see how if you use three syllables, VI-o-LET, it would mess up the iambic meter. If I use this again, I will try to work around that problem and maybe use “purple” which seems to be a brighter color and may be more appropriate. Thanks!
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Yes, purple would work well in various ways. We say ‘violet’ when describing a rainbow, so you would lose some immediacy from that association – but you have not included all the colours, so the rainbow is only suggested anyway.
And yes, it’s fine with that extra comma included. 🙂
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Clever use of color. Well done!
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Thank you, Bev! I’m glad you liked it.
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I love all the colors in your post Frank ~ Th garden is filled with beautiful shades of the season ~
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I was thinking of colors from plants in the Chicago Botanic Garden when writing this. Thanks, Grace!
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I love the line about lavender..indeed you created a different kind of lovely rainbow.
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I liked that line, too, and I may emphasize lavender more in a future revision. Thanks, Kathy!
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I like how the colour drips down the page.
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I tried to make the sound smooth and flowing. Thanks, Paul!
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Love the rhyme here, and that your poem is as colorful and blooming as those flowers.
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Thanks, Xenia! I was trying to match that photo in some way.
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I love the way you have presented patience growing in a process of colours, a beautiful spectrum . I also think it is nice to see red as a calmer colour.
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I wanted to change my stereotype of some of these colors, red (anger) and green (jealousy) in particular. Thanks, Mish!
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I love your use of color and the way you let color control the action. Brilliant write!
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Thank you, Delaina! I’m glad you liked the use of color.
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Lovely stuff – I shall not fear the night!
Anna :o]
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I suppose one test of patience is its ability to counter fear in some way. Thanks, Anna!
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You knowing there’s no
need to fear the night
Exactly! Darkness will bring a lot of colors into play but all in the mind. No reason to get all worked up. You have an eye for a great angle in your pic, Frank!
Hank
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Thanks, Hank! I’m glad you liked the photo. They are all taken by my Samsung phone.
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I can hear the temperament of all those colors. The underlying stories behind the flowers is quite clever and beautiful
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These colors do seem to have a temperament. I was thinking, based on other comments, that patience may be a combination of them like a white light one splits up with a prism into different colors. Thanks, Walter!
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I love a photo prompt–so many words (at least a 10000 erupt & are teased no a page. I like the suggestion that metaphorically chakra & aura come into play. Thanks for visiting my FB photography site. Show more of your images; drop by often; smile.
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Thanks for showing me that page. I do have some minimalist photos that people there might enjoy. I didn’t think of them as “minimalist” before seeing your FB page. I’ll add some more and see if people find them interesting.
Thanks, Glenn!
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Quite the spectrum of feelings!!!
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Thank you, Rajani! I am glad you liked it.
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You did a real colorful poem and you gave them a meaning. Artistic stroke.
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I am glad you liked it! Thanks!
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Caution sings yellow
holds green red
blue
never
reaching
violet.. push
me in Nature
and swim me
wind me water air..:)
OtHeR thaN thaT
Hi Frank.. HoPe
yoU aRE
eNjoYiNg
sOMe ViolET..:)
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I am. I hope you are as well, Fred. Thanks!
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WeLL.. but a little tired
As the last 3 to 4 Day effort
Arrives at 30,003 words
A new Record.. And
Now to Dance
Away
From
Words..
With WiNks..:)
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I like the way you subvert the (emotional) colour stereotypes.
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I realized when writing this that some colors I associate with rather negative emotions like red or green, but there must be a better way to look at them since they are beautiful colors. Thanks, Rosemary!
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Lovely trip through the rainbow!
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Thank you, Nan!
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Well penned, Frank. Colors on stage.
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Thanks, Eugenia!
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Ah yes, one needs be patient with one’s self in outgrowing fears
Have a nice Wednesday
Much love…
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Thank you, Gillena!
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Nice color spectrum poem, Frank.
Rainbows are made for reminders.
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It occurred to me that patience may be a more important state than other emotions and contain many colors in its bright white. Thanks, Jim!
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You’ve capture the very beautiful of life and everything in this picture. 🙂
Thank you for you always being you. 🙂
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Thank you! I am glad you found it beautiful.
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You welcome frank.
I’m officially back my friend.
I posted something that I think you’ll finally understand clearly. 🙂 Stop by and hope you enjoy. 🙂
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i can feel a dramatic yet beautiful change on this one. 🙂
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Thank you! There is a sort of change moving through those colorful perspectives on patience.
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Patience painted as a work of art, Frank.
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Thank you, Sara!
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I enjoyed the dance of shifting colors…
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Thanks, Magaly!
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Patience is exactly like the colors you’ve painted here…peaceful and calm. Beautiful write.
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Thank you, Lynn! I am glad you like it.
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Very classy. The rhythm works so well, and you have such a knack for rhymes that sound unforced.
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Probably not a “knack” though, is it? Hard work cunningly disguised as something that just rolled out of the pen…
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The first draft comes easily, but the revision takes time because I usually don’t like the first draft. It sounds either forced or boring or meaningless, like something I wouldn’t want to read myself tomorrow. Eventually, it gets done, but a year from now may need another revision. Thanks, Sarah!
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Brilliant use of color here, Frank ❤️
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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It takes a great patience to grow a flower. I like turning the senses into colors. Have a nice weekend, Frank!
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Thanks, Bekkie! Growing plants takes patience. I was if wondering patience could be best thought of as white light containing many colors. Have a nice weekend!
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I like that, Frank! I can see patience as that. Sorry this is so late in answering but I finally got some time. I found some poets in my area to meet with and talk poetry. I just started but it’s wonderful. Can’t wait to go again.
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“Must give us pause.” What happens to colors at night? deep reflection.
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Good point. I suspect these colors are like an aura, or if you saw the animated movie, Trolls, and you probably have if you have children or grandchildren, it would be letting your true colors show.
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Wow, impressive. Enjoyed that
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Thanks, Sabio! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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I love how you tempt us with the colours and our innate sense of them and ease us into that last line.
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Thank you, Mary. I am glad you liked them!
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A very colourful and apt way to depict moods.
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Thank you, Kim! It if revise this I will probably add in more colors like yellow and orange.
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What moods would yellow and orange depict do you think?
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Adding yellow and orange would include all seven of the colors associated with main chakras and fill out the rainbow better. Orange is associated with creativity and yellow with intellect. The idea would be that patience has all of these colors the way light has all the colors. Then I would try to suggest that “patience” is another word for “love”. Something like that.
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Sounds good. Looking forward to reading the finished rainbow poem.
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Very unusual poem, Frank. Lovely!
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Thanks, Robbie! Fitting something to that prompt led me in an unusual direction.
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The post is lovely. I admire what you write. It’s amazing how you put your thoughts into words. 😍
Would be honored if you check out my new post 🙂
https://mahimajalan.wordpress.com/2017/09/16/let-creativity-rule/
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Thank you, Mahimajalan!
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