I hold you with an aging hand.
Winter let go fall.
Even sparrows understand.
It takes no time at all.
Eyes and hands recall.
Text: Linked to dVerse Open Link Night. Kim is hosting. I am aiming for brevity in this poem. In particular I want to use no more than five lines. I hope to present brevity as a challenge for next week’s Meeting the Bar.
Photos: “Snow and Shadow”, above, “Blooming Together”, below.
Brevity is a challenge but when you do it well like this it’s fantastic. I started out writing poetry on twitter…. 140 characters is a challenge.
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That would be another good way to set up a brevity constraint. I tried writing a short story on twitter for Carrot Ranch a few weeks ago. Some were able to do it. Thanks, Bjorn!
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I agree with Bjorn, Frank. Your poem is like an egg, small and perfect with a golden yolk!
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Thank you, Kim!
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I agree, writing short poems is definitely challenging. Beautifully done, Frank!
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I am going to go for brevity this coming week. Thank you, Sanaa!
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Beautifully written Frank, it is so nice to hold hands with those we love when we are ageing :o)
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It is. It is almost as if one has to get old to see the other young again. Thank you, Xenia!
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You have told of a lifelong love in just one stanza
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Thank you, Walter! I did aim for brevity.
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Brevity maybe but such depth in so few words.
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Thank you, Paul! I suspect that deep rabbit hole Alice went through had a small opening.
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What a beautiful thought. You always manage a wonderful photo that complements the words too. The sparrow image is just right. (K)
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Thank you! I’m glad you liked the photos as well.
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Beautiful 💜
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Thank you!
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Brevity is wonderful and you make it work so well here–
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Thank you! I am going to try to practice it this week.
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How time flies… a good one Frank.
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Time flies. I am glad you liked this, Vivian!
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🙂
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Rails of Memories
Guidelines of Bridges….
Have a
Nice
Weekend Frank..:)
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Thank you, Fred!
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SMiLes..
Thanks for
The continuing
Inspiration of
Your poetry and
You are welcome..:)
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brevity does force one to distill a poem down to it’s essence. I enjoyed the poem.
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Thank you! Hopefully some essence remains.
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kaykuala
Brevity at its best Frank. It is not easy to be brief!
Hank
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Thank you, Hank! I’m glad you enjoyed this.
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Brevity is the soul of wit (Shakespeare), lingerie (Dorothy Parker) and the important stuff said in AA meetings. Slow learner. It’s best to be Frank … take a bow!
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Thank you, Brendan! Good points about brevity.
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The fourth line makes me think of an Emily Dickinson poem about dying, and I wonder if you too had recently read it. Your poem is mastery, along with the photo, as you two poets describe the grace and gentleness of death. Your fifth line somehow clearly says how it (the whole cycle) was all worth it.
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It is all worth it. I am glad you liked this, Amaya!
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I’m not sure you meant it, but “it takes no time at all for the hand to age.” Love this poem
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Yes, that is true and when we see the understanding is timeless. Thank you, Annell!
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Saying the most in fewest words…that is poetry! Beautiful!
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Thank you, Mary!
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You succeeded in communicating a lovely truth with brevity.
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Thank you, Nan!
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Excellent take on the challenge. So much said in a few words.
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I am glad you liked it, Eugenia!
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“Eyes and hands recall. ” They do. They do.
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Thank you, Imelda!
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