Like Day and Night

Maple Leaves in the Sun

Although day does its best to delight
                                                                             In the darkness my mind can escape
With the Sun giving rest to the night
                                                                             Like a dream while the stars stay awake
When its setting is done
                                                                             Retains full mystery
And the night turns to fun
                                                                            And whatever may be
Then the Sun knows what’s done was done right.
                                                                            Of the love that was done for its sake.

Text: Linked to dVerse Meeting the Bar where Paul is hosting featuring the form Contrapuntal Poetry.  Here the limerick about the day hopefully adds counterpoint to the italicized one about the night.

Photos: “Maple Leaves in the Sun”, above, and “Calm Afternoon Waiting for Rain”, below.

Calm Afternoon Waiting for Rain

Author: Frank Hubeny

I enjoy walking, poetry and short prose as well as taking pictures with my phone.

47 thoughts on “Like Day and Night”

  1. What I love about this verse, is the intensity with your voice reading. It transforms into something else, and I think for the better with sound. It seems again, to reinforce that poetry is superior with being spoken. Very nice, Frank, and I love the intensity you bring to this.

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    1. Thank you, Jane! I made the audio because I realized I was saying this silently to myself in different ways than I thought I intended it and I wanted to make sure it was clear although I’m not sure what it all means. I’m glad you liked the audio version.

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  4. kaykuala

    With the Sun giving rest to the night
    Then the Sun knows what’s done was done right

    It gives a nice feeling, Frank! Very innovative to be done with limericks!

    Hank

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  7. There is something so deceptively clever here. And it’s more than just trying to format according to the WP’s ideas and limitations.

    Each poem is simple, deceptively so, almost and yet letting it soak in, one begins to be teased by its depths. Then combine the two – and it reveals even more depth, for the simplicity. So even if the meter offers a rather “lighter feel” this offers us a zen like quality, of a frolicsome nature.

    Great job with it Frank.

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  8. A wistful counterpoint of day and night, Frank, which has echoes of William Blake in the rhyme scheme and the imagery of the sun resting, the stars and the mystery.

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  9. Great work Frank,

    there is something magical in the shift day into night, because it is natural process with contradictions, we need light to replace night and vice versa. They are two poles of the same whole.Everything comes in pair in the nature

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  13. Hi Frank. The two poems are wonderful. To create the contrapuntal you could read line one from poem one followed by line one from poem two…line two from one, line two from two and so on….it’s not clear with the format above but as many have pointed out WordPress makes format difficult. Italics of brackets might work.

    To write it you could do this:

    Although day does its best to delight
    (In the darkness my mind can escape)
    With the Sun giving rest to the night
    (Like a dream while the stars stay awake)
    When its setting is done
    (And whatever may be)
    And the night turns to fun
    (Retains full mystery)
    Then the Sun knows what’s done was done right.
    (Of the love that was done for its sake.)

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