Coin Laundry

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If I could only wash my age-soaked heart
The way I do these clothes in this machine
And trust in thirty minutes it’d be clean.
I’d likely try it once or twice to start.
What soap would do the best to tear apart
What’s good from what has grown with time too mean?
I’d make it cleaner than I yet have seen
And wash it everyday - if I were smart.

These quarters are too little I confess.
For payment ancient angels might want more
Since no one gives forgiveness out for free,
But then came dreams of lucid mystery.
They weren't what I thought I was looking for
Yet I felt clean enough to let them bless.

Linked to dVerse Meeting the Bar where Jilly is hosting and the form is the sonnet with enjambment. I hope there are some lines above that represent enjambment.

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Author: Frank Hubeny

I enjoy walking, poetry and short prose as well as taking pictures with my phone.

38 thoughts on “Coin Laundry”

  3. A cute modern sonnet, with clever enjambment. I, too, went with a modern sonnet, but I used the Shakespearian rhyme scheme.

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  6. I like these lines:
    “What soap would do the best to tear apart
    What’s good from what has grown with time too mean?” and the last two lines, where they weren’t what you thought you were looking for.

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  7. Now that was a surprise! A sonnet to a launderette! A marvellous extended metaphor for starting over. A good question:
    ‘What soap would do the best to tear apart
    What’s good from what has grown with time too mean?’

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  8. i Used to Wash Dirt Out
    of my “Clothes” With “Soap and
    Water” (True Katrina did/does that too)
    Then
    i Dance
    A Song
    Comes
    Next
    No Longer Needing
    “Clean” “Clothes”
    “Dirt” Returns
    to: Love PerHaps
    A ThinG For Dance..
    From: Thanks Frank THere
    Are ALWays New Directions
    WitH No ReaSons
    ALWaYS
    LoVE NoW
    SMiLES From:
    to: Dance And Sing..:)

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  12. Frank, what I was referring to was these three lines:

    If I could only wash my age-soaked heart
    The way I do these clothes in this machine
    And trust in thirty minutes they’d be clean.

    You are talking about your heart that you want to be clean, so it should be “it would be.”. not “they’d be clean. “You’ve used the clothes as a metaphor but then switched to talking about the clothes, not the heart.. See what I mean???

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