Canvas – Six Sentence Story

Brian didn’t realize how messed up his worldview was until he saw for himself the cracks. Meanwhile Kate itemized the consequences he’d have to face if he didn’t get his head screwed on straight.

The problem was Brian could no longer see the meaningless splatter as anything but garbage. Fifty years from now, perhaps, they’d wish they did things differently, but now, to stop the throbs of screaming, Brian and Kate split up.

Kate met a succession of knights sparkling with possibilities until their dragons (or her own) appeared. Brian covered the canvas with snow white pigment to hide the cracks and bury a voice coming from a source deeper than his own distracting addictions.


Denise offers “canvas” as the word to be used in this week’s Six Sentence Stories.

Beautiful Winter
Snow White Winter

Author: Frank Hubeny

I enjoy walking, poetry and short prose as well as taking pictures with my phone.

49 thoughts on “Canvas – Six Sentence Story”

  1. This one has me thinking a lot. There is a lot to chew on here: “Brian covered the canvas with snow white pigment to hide the cracks and bury a voice coming from a source deeper than his own distracting addictions.”

    Shalom!

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    1. I left both of those characters without a good resolution. Hopefully within the next fifty years (or sooner) they will repent and do more than cover up their problems. Thank you, Michael!

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  2. Excellent piece, Frank, but rather bleak in its outlook!

    And thanks for subscribing to my YouTube Channel, I hope you found something else you liked.

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  3. As “onlooker”, difficult to determine – was their decision to split the better but more difficult one to make? Or was it the easiest, providing immediate relief?
    Sentence 3 tells us Brian’s state of mind had reached a point of no return. Kate perhaps, relieved.
    Well done, Frank.

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  4. I have read the story three times over and the comments too and can’t get past it being anything but a friendly little difference of opinion.
    I think it’s the “get his head screwed on straight” that seemed familiar, too familiar, that made me come to that conclusion. I’ve used it sooo many times. 😉

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  5. damn!*
    Visual and, yet, suggestive…inviting the Reader to see the world in their own terms.

    killer line: “…but now, to stop the throbs of screaming, Brian and Kate split up.”

    a compliment on a simple, engaging and yet open-to-the-Reader’s participation**
    ** as is usually the case with good stories

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  6. Such stunning use of the word Canvas for an impactful story!
    “bury a voice coming from a source deeper than his own distracting addictions.” so amazingly said. That voice has so much wisdom but for our willingness to listen.

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    1. Good point. The real fairy tales takes a lot of work. Thank you, Mimi!

      I liked your story about getting a new phone and not being able to figure out how to use it. That recently happened to me. I still don’t know how to use much of it.

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  7. Best that they split up – especially if it stopped the throbs of screaming (a great line!).
    To be able to reflect fifty years later suggests they are fairly young – good enough time to grow and find happiness with their own selves.

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  8. When you’re up to your A$$ in alligators, it’s hard to remember your objective was to drain the swamp.
    Too bad they were so busy fighting themselves that they didn’t see each other as allies.

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