Surreal Rhythm – Six Sentence Story

George loved to run his mouth going after his targets with the punishing rhythm of a piercing sword. He didn’t think he was doing anything wrong because words, surreal as they might make things appear with new moon star light or full moon madness, weren’t really swords, or were they?

Regardless, he was so successful that some were afraid they would not be able to survive without getting the mark of George on their foreheads and so they took it. Eventually those with sharper tongues pinned George to the ground. They ran through their mouths loud, rationalized nonsense spiced with curses until he admitted defeat and took their marks.

As ancient prophecy foretold such troubles would continue until they were stopped by the Anointed King, but in the meantime one would have to put up with a succession of starry-eyed new moon Georges with full moon mad king aspirations who preferred wounding to healing.


Denise offers the prompt word “rhythm” to be used in this week’s Six Sentence Stories. As I kept altering this story it got to a point that I thought it might also work for Eugenia’s challenge this week where she offered the prompt word “surreal”.

Proverbs 12:18, “Reckless speech is like the thrusts of a sword, but the tongue of the wise brings healing..” (Tree of Life Version)

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Author: Frank Hubeny

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42 thoughts on “Surreal Rhythm – Six Sentence Story”

    1. Thank you! It is a great proverb. I didn’t notice (or take seriously) the similarity between “word” and “sword” either until you mentioned it. It makes me wonder now how they are related.

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  1. …on the more mundane plain* there are those (far too great in number) who drawn sustenance from causing pain and discomfit in those unfortunate enough to allow themselves to be trapped in a verbal exchange.
    Well-crafted Six, yo

    *accidental, I assure you! lol

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  2. Great Six, Frank. I especially enjoyed the final phrase: “…a succession of starry-eyed new moon Georges with full moon mad king aspirations who preferred wounding to healing.” Wonderful word-jamming!

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    1. Although I hadn’t thought of eastern orthodox conversions that’s an interesting association with the name “George”. Originally, I just picked the name of someone I don’t know personally. Getting the “mark of George” was like getting the “mark of the Beast”. George was one of the many manifestations of anti-Christ. Thanks you, Jim!

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  3. George knew precisely, his words were swords. It’s unfortunate there are those who either enjoy inflicting pain on others because of their own pain, or those who simply are “awful” people and find pleasure in it. A shame either way.
    Thoughtful Six, Frank.

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    1. I am not sure I follow all of it now either after looking at it again. I was trying to do something with the Mark of the Beast and letting George be one of the many spirits of anti-Christ.

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