Trying to find something impressive to say the guide told the group he was leading through the cave that some of the mineral deposits they were looking at were as old as the most ancient graves directly above them in Blislisnis, but none of them were impressed.
He then asked them if they ever experienced darkness blacker than a demon’s heart before? Hearing only snorts of ridicule he waited till they were walking down a precarious set of metal stairs to turn off the lights without warning. Although the space in the cave collapsed abruptly onto their eyes the echoes of their screams convinced them it was still there.
When the guide let the light pop reality back into place with its ups and downs and rights and lefts, the group plotted in whispers to get even, should they ever get out, by filing complaints to the proper authorities of Blislisnis. The guide knew the stirrings of their hearts, but he also knew there weren’t enough live people left in the ghost town above them to care.
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Denise offers the prompt word “space” for this week’s Six Sentence Stories.
Matthew 8:12 “But the children of the kingdom shall be cast out into outer darkness: there shall be weeping and gnashing of teeth.” (KJV)

Oh Frank! Your last line was fantastic!
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Thank you, Susan! I am glad you liked the story.
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Scary story
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The original story was tame, but then I got carried away. Thank you, Sadje!
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It’s good to create something unexpected 👍🏼
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Oh my! And some will think it fiction until it is too late.
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May none of us have to experience that total darkness. Thank you, Mary!
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Excellent. Complaining to the proper authorities of Blislisnis will get you nowhere. They do not care.
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Exactly. May they find their way out of that cave. Thank you, Michael!
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Well done! It doesn’t bode well for the tour group. I liked your descriptions and how you build the tension.
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Thank you! That tour group looks like they need a guide out of that cave.
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Yes, I think they do!
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We done, Frank and well paired with the lovely photo.
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Thank you, Dan!
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Somehow I think there was probably a lot of weeing and spitting of false teeth when they were cast into the inner darkness. 😉
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I was once on a tour in a cave when the guide did something like that except he told us he was going to do it and we were all seated. It was shocking to see space vanish.
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Or did it?
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We toured a cave once where they did, indeed, turn off all the lights for a moment. It’s a profound darkness i do not ever want to experience again.
Your tour group need to find The Guide, and i hope they do.
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I experienced that moment of darkness as well on a cave tour. It was the most memorable part but I don’t want to experience it again.
Your story reminded me that it might be possible to not only listen to music but play an instrument. YouTube videos can be very helpful.
Thank you, Mimi!
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Scary biscuits, Frank.
And your comment on my own post this week is the best I’ve read for a short eternity!
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I am glad you liked the story and my comment. Thank you!
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Wow! Excellent story!
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Thank you, Eugenia!
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Most welcome, Frank!
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Uffda! You’re warming us up for Halloween/Samhain, aren’t you?
Pity the smug travelers, for they shall inherit the darkness…?
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They might inherit something they don’t want. Thank you, Liz!
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seriiously good stuff!
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Thank you, Paul!
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“Although the space in the cave collapsed abruptly onto their eyes the echoes of their screams convinced them it was still there.”
what a great line! totally evocative on a non-verbal level… damn!*
*compliment and wordage-envy lol
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Thank you, Clark! I am glad you liked that line. I kept revising it over and over.
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A dark story, literally. Well done, Frank.
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Thank you, Keith!
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Wow Frank this one was very very good, with many themes on darkness and the verse reminds us of what’s at stake
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There is a lot at stake. Thank you, Jim!
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Blessings Frank
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Frank! What an excellent story! Am I surprised Clark’s favorite line is also mine? lol
A dark tale with a message of warning. But “hope springs eternal”, right?!
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My hope is that we all avoid those kinds of cave tours. Thank you, Denise!
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HI Frank. that last line was certainly a good twist to this tale.
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I am glad you liked that line. I was looking for an unusual ending. Thank you, Robbie!
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