Express – Six Sentence Story

In the dining car of the express train to hell Ryan motioned for the waiter. When the waiter arrived he complained about the quality of the food saying, “Any decent chef would know how to prepare steak and don’t forget I’m riding your train first class.”

Sitting across the aisle from Ryan was a woman who escalated her protest of his butchery of sentient life forms as soon as she heard him order the steak special. Pointing to her with his thumb Ryan asked the waiter, “And could you, please, do something about that?”

The waiter apologized saying he would personally scold the chef, however, he regretted that he could not do anything about Ryan’s fellow passenger since she also held a first class ticket. Not wanting to further alarm the woman the waiter bent down and whispered an assurance in Ryan’s ear that shortly after reaching their destination he would never see her again.

Denise offers the prompt word “express” to be used in this week’s Six Sentence Stories.

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Author: Frank Hubeny

I enjoy walking, poetry and short prose as well as taking pictures with my phone.

53 thoughts on “Express – Six Sentence Story”

  1. 8 sentence story. The waiter announces to the couple that since they were in 1st class they could order anything they liked, for free, with any conditions they would choose to add. And the chef, the devil himself, would mess up their orders on purpose, because, after all, they were on an express train to hell.


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    1. I like those additional sentences. I was thinking when writing the story that the chef was some kind of devil and messed the meal up on purpose. The waiter, probably another devil, didn’t offer to bring a new steak. Actually the waiter didn’t help much at all. Thank you, Rebecca!


  2. Most excellent opening sentence, Frank! And a superb follow up. It doth put a smile up my countenance.
    Another good line ,”Pointing to her with his thumb Ryan asked the waiter, “And could you, please, do something about that?”
    Very engaging Six 🙂

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    1. That’s true. One should probably be grateful for whatever company one has.

      I liked your description of Mrs S being moved far from her friends and to a nursing home in your story. You brought out the loneliness experienced by both her and her friends.


  3. (the) Hellbound train!
    What an excellent setting, so many directions to go, surely this is the old-fashioned equivalent of the holo-deck on the Enterprise (Star Trek Next Generation).
    So much potential
    (And, as an opener, this little Six was a good example of the fun of such stories.)

    Good ‘un

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    1. I am glad you liked this, Paul! I found the ending disturbing since I imagined, but I did not make it explicit, that the woman sitting next to him was his wife.


  4. What an excellent opening line – In the dining car of the express train to hell… I have to think the man doesn’t know where his express train is going. I reckon if he did, he’d do something about changing direction!

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  5. Interesting story Frank. For a second I was imagining myself inside that restaurant and seeing the anger and rage of this customer complaining about the awful food!

    Great post👏

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  6. These are not easy tasks and sometimes we do not “delight” in doing them
    We want Justice but not if it interferes with our comfort.
    We want peace, but our speech is often loaded with Violence.
    We say we want to be forgiven but find it hard to forgive.
    We need to look at ourselves with honesty and see how we can work better to bring about God’s will on earth as it is in heaven.

    “Lord, you are my help, do not delay.”

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