Service – Six Sentence Story


As Rafael finished texting Bill the message “pedophile traffic second tunnel east” that kept flashing in his mind, his daughter, Celia, arrived, sat down at the outdoor café table, and, as he expected she would, began berating him. Listening to her reminded him of the disrespectful way he treated his own father decades ago and given that experience he knew there would be no service he could perform to make things right with her. Suddenly Celia rose to leave and hissed, “Who do you think you are anyway?” 

Sensing this as his last opportunity, Rafael quickly said when she rushed off, “Don’t trust that guy you’re with.”

When Celia reached her apartment she remained outside pacing the sidewalk trying to imagine which deceiving friend betrayed her by telling her dad about Derek, how it was done, and how she would get even. Rafael slowly sipped his coffee hoping she might return, wondering if it would be a good idea to try to meet her again, and then stood up, put his empty cup in the dirty dish container, and left.

Denise offers the prompt word “service” for this week’s Six Sentence Stories. Continued from Filter – Six Sentence Story. Next: Walk – Six Sentence Story or Gear – Six Sentence Story.

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Author: Frank Hubeny

I enjoy walking, poetry and short prose as well as taking pictures with my phone.

55 thoughts on “Service – Six Sentence Story”

  1. The coolest thing about writing a Six is the opportunity for it to turn into another Six and another…pretty soon you have an ongoing story where at anytime, “someone” else appears and there you go! Like Raphael. New characters and a storyline within a storyline.
    Looking forward to what comes next, Frank 🙂

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  2. Excellent installment! Tightly crafted narrative with enough slack to allow us Readers to do some of the ‘set design’.
    Gotta love the way characters can, if we’re lucky (and/or skillful enough), become more and more real.
    very cool

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    1. Listening to my own children I smile at finally realizing how my own parents must have felt when listening to me. My own situation has not, thankfully, reached the level that Rafael experienced.

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